3.9.11

DRAFTED ETERNITY

[ preview---boring class--need something to spice up, hence this piece: it dates back to 2007--n the title was suggested by my friend, kushal mehta!]

i had long wanted to feel you
touch you places forbidden
that lay hidden
from the world outside.
they so very enthrall me
that i am often found dumb
the high valleys , the deep curves
have all excited my nerves
for ages;
but now, when i stand so near
with just the skin covering you up, my dear
i am tense.
the brownness of your body
took me so unready
that i lay startled

as you invited me in
to commit the original sin
i felt divine
as i kissed you from head to toe
with the greed growing more and more
you tasted like wine!
you were tender and hard was i
nerves were taut as i made a try
to push open the curtain:

to get in there , you helped me out
with yourself wide spread out
carefully showing off the pink
it felt wet and mild
turned on , i felt wild
to the extreme
my maleness throbbed
as you robbed
me of my calm
.

you were biting on to my pride
i felt power inside
and felt brave and dared
to fill in you myself









your body shivered and you moaned
in joyful pain, when you groaned
i fell in love again
as you lay by me much quiet
after the prowl and hunt
just like a resting lionness
i thanked God for His grace
to have given me this moment-
the moment of eternal pleasure
the moment i would always treasure
.
the moment of extreme emotions
the moment of pure devotion
the moment of complete belonging to you
the moment of my life





8 comments:

  1. one of your best works till date :)

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  2. ur funniest piece so far, make sure u keep this handy when u actually get down to doing it, ur partner will be instantly turned on.
    (or it might backfire and u might have a convulsing partner in a fit of uncontrolled mirth on the bed too, this is actually a two-edged sword :P)

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  3. Explicit :P
    1 perfect word for the write up :P
    Kar class chilo go!! :)

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  4. this is ur best!!! a masterpiece :)

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  5. gone are those days when u did write this, me at internals -- but must say -- this is a masterpiece my friend mits... few people can come up with such expressions........

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  6. i persnly thnk dat it cud be far betr if u had reduced d boldness.. ektu kom descriptiv hoe jodi feelings barto den porte bhalo lagto. kenona je kono reader er ekta nijoswo imagining space thaka dorkar.. nd writer er sei space ta 6arle reader puro byapar take aro bhalo feel krte pare.. tobe pore besh bhaloi lege6e.. :)

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  7. This context can bring out only one reaction from me-"iissh..chih..aal.:p"
    But darun express korechis..hats off!!!

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