31.8.11

Adulterated!

in the dark hours, i cry
i breathe hard as i lie
     naked, on the floor!
the flesh pole hitting me hard
plunging deeper, completely offguard
     with blood oozing more!
i shouted, i screamed out loud:
i even managed to pull a crowd
     to fetch me a drape ----
they gathered, watched so hushed
i bled, and yet none rushed
     lest they miss the rape!
pain grew strong and i grew weak,
i was drenched in blood vein's leak,
     turned into a mock for all:
carcass i had turned into then,
snatched, smothered, wildly bitten;
     yet tears failed to fall.




days came and passed by
it was then people came and made a try
     to help me get over:
but the nightmare haunts me still,
the grasp, the bite and the drill
     have slurred the inside, forever!
penned down by at

11 comments:

  1. NilanjanaAugust 31, 2011 at 12:21 PM

    absolutely brutal and wonderful

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  2. Deb_SGAugust 31, 2011 at 12:47 PM

    .....yet tears failed to fall,
    I wonder where are they who claim to be tall.

    The divine world or the serene way
    I need to live, what more to pay?
    The brutal crowd can only talk
    Keys of conscience can only unlock.

    Such more realities yet to be written
    Mr. MDS, what a piece..You are unbeaten

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  3. Deb_SGAugust 31, 2011 at 12:48 PM

    loved that line.. "yet tears failed to fall"

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  4. mit13August 31, 2011 at 12:51 PM

    i loved ur rhyme , debdripta!!!

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  5. Rabied SoulAugust 31, 2011 at 12:55 PM

    wish i could write it's "good". but that will be ironic. applauding the object (the poem) will contradict the subject (the theme) because the latter is so cruelly and horribly savage and aghast and yet true. I'm in a real dilemma to comment on it. believe me, the more I intend to utter the words "good", the more I'm drawn to the reality that is portrayed and then i feel that i'll join hands with those barbarians if say it's "good". because there is nothing "good" about it. it's disgusting, frustrating, and despicable. it will be tantamount to raping her again. Great..

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  6. mit13August 31, 2011 at 12:57 PM

    sourav dey-----wt do i say after this?

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  7. pritha sinhaSeptember 1, 2011 at 12:08 PM

    speechless....

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  8. KushalSeptember 6, 2011 at 3:47 AM

    brilliant play of words..expressions so grimly expressed yet with the denial..good one!

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  9. diyaSeptember 10, 2011 at 11:43 AM

    Its beautiful!! The depth of feelings r intricately woven in a heart rendering composition!!!!!

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  10. aimamJanuary 8, 2012 at 1:28 AM

    1 sentence...u r good

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  11. aniJanuary 9, 2012 at 11:22 AM

    brutally nice........

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